An Essay Realization

I realized while I was writing my essay a few odd things about the first primary source,  I discovered a few things that were good about it and a few things that were not the best while I was writing my paper. Naturally I couldn't go into great detail about what was wrong with the source in my paper but I thought would highlight the pros and cons here. Ill start off by saying I like most of the information that Strayer puts forth, however there are a few problems with this primary source that should be noted. Most notably, it is written in the first person using 21st century sentence structure. It is a piece about this girl's feeling about her life and it is curious how Shostak tried to tell it in first person rather than 3rd person. I think the source would have more footing in the scientific community if it was written as a research report or a 3rd person view on the situation with a recap at the end reciting where she got this information. The problem is I do not know whether this is all theory or she has hard evidence to prove some of her claims. I do agree with several of her points but its very hard to get people to follow what you are saying without some sort of hard evidence cited in your paper. However, I shouldn't be so hard on her because she most likely included all of this information but it was not included in the book. So if she did, I may choose to go find her whole paper sometime and see where she got her information. The reason i'm choosing to highlight this source is because it doesn't make broad claims, it makes very specific and defined claims that need some sort of backing in order for us to accept them. Again, I do agree with several of her points I just want some research reports.